BSA703 20/4

 After taking a break yesterday due to pain in my fingers, back into it today for a long day of modelling to hit tomorrows due date.

One bathroom window although Im thinking more of a frosted glass would be more appropriate for privacy sake.

Notes on the current animatic version

• The context of the two goldfish at the end is lost due to cuts at the beginning
• There is no solid link between Pavo sitting in the bath and the rest of the clip - nothing suggests he's worrying about a date
• James commented it feels too safe(I've been saying this since the animation won the class vote) and doesn't feel cinematic to watch in its current form. The camera movements feel a bit cheesy and 4th wall breaking(unrealistic, ruining immersion). 
• Opening scene doesn't really link the water overflowing to his anxiety manifesting, just looks like water is overflowing. There is a lot of time spent looking at Pavo in the bath like a creeper.
• the waiter is already angry with no reason when he appears, instead of starting to get angry as Pavo takes too long to order. 
• for the beginning perhaps having the water seep out of the walls and drain from the toilet/bath could show how unnatural it is, then cut to Pavo standing in the mirror straightening his tie and the reflection showing no water anywhere. Pavo framed by the mirror could transition nicely into Pavo framed by the restaurant door. I wonder if flipping to a POV sweep of the restaurant would work better in that moment, showing how full the restaurant is.
• the shot arrangement around Pavo looking out of the bathroom at betty is a little odd. I think having cuts between his face in the porthole and a close up on her sadness is more efficient than the current setup.
• i think having little cutscenes for the credits could show Betty slowing joining into Pavo's life - purchasing and adding a 2nd fish to his bowl, adding a 2nd toothbrush to the cup at his house etc.